Sour memories (prose poem)

Little girl painting her toes in the mirror grapefruit pink  “Daddy’s home!” but she pretends she doesn’t hear  Monday rolls around and Mummy’s still got a swollen eye  A week

later Daddy takes his pills again and cleans the counters and brings tulips home

It’s now July and the girl watches fat bees gorge on orchids  She picks one that’s apricot orange

After school she rides the bus to see Mummy but the flowers are already rusting at the tips “Thank you sweetie”

Says the nurse “I’ll make sure she gets it when she wakes up”

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20 comments

  1. Natalie · February 29, 2016

    I’ve always loved prose poems, and I think you did a wonderful job with this one. I love the image of the little girl painting her toenails in the mirror. Such a vivid image! 🙂

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    • Milxntx · February 29, 2016

      Thank you for the feedback! This is my first time writing a prose poem so I really appreciate the reassurance.

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      • Natalie · February 29, 2016

        A good poem deserves feedback. And it’s definitely worth a follow! 😉

        How long have you been writing for?

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      • Milxntx · February 29, 2016

        On and off ever since I can remember but more frequently and seriously the past two or so years. You?

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      • Natalie · February 29, 2016

        Same here 🙂 I’ve just started submitting my work to journals and magazines. It’s a scary — and gratifying — process.

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      • Milxntx · February 29, 2016

        I haven’t reached that stage yet, currently just studying Creative Writing at university to hone in my skills. I can imagine it being very nerve racking to begin submitting your work

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      • Natalie · February 29, 2016

        The creative writing classes at my university made a huge difference in the quality of my writing — enjoy them!

        I think a blog is a great way to prepare yourself to submit. Blogging allows you to put your work out in the world without the pressure of a potential rejection. Though I suppose you could always get nasty comments… I haven’t seen that happen too much on WordPress. I’m glad for that 🙂

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      • Milxntx · February 29, 2016

        I’m only in my first year but I can already see major improvements in my work, so satisfying.
        I agree, that’s partly why I made it its a nice little confidence boost.

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      • Natalie · February 29, 2016

        Awesome! Imagine how good your work will be by the end 🙂 When you’re ready to start submitting, check to see if your university has a journal of their own. Most large universities do. This is a great first place to submit because often you’ll know the editors and it will feel less scary.

        Confidence boosts rock!

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      • Milxntx · February 29, 2016

        Yeah mine has one, but I don’t know, I’ve been sceptical of submitting my work. Just a confidence thing I guess, need to do more writing and hopefully that’ll come naturally.
        How did you go about submitting your work? I don’t even know how I’d approach that

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      • Natalie · February 29, 2016

        It differs based on each journal. Most university journals will post fliers and send out a mass email. At my school, submissions were due by the end of the fall semester, and the journal was published around spring break.

        Most non-school journals will have a submissions tab on their website with info on how and when to submit. For example, here’s a journal open to college students but not university-based: http://www.siblinijournal.com/

        Under submit, they have info on what they accept and how to send it to them 🙂

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      • Milxntx · February 29, 2016

        Okay so pretty simple :’) I thought it was much harder than that for whatever reason

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      • Natalie · February 29, 2016

        Just make sure you follow all the instructions provided, and it’s honestly that easy! Getting accepted is the hard part, of course, but the more you write, the better you’ll be. Stick with it and you’ll go places 🙂

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      • Milxntx · February 29, 2016

        Nice, have you been accepted?

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      • Natalie · February 29, 2016

        To some 🙂 Not to others. Rejections are no fun, but they always inspire me to work harder and write more.

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      • Milxntx · February 29, 2016

        Think everyone gets rejected at some point though, nice to hear you persevering!

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      • Natalie · February 29, 2016

        Thanks! If you ever need any help submitting, or just want to talk to a fellow writer, shoot me a note. We writers need to stick together 🙂

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      • Milxntx · February 29, 2016

        Awesome, I’ll definitely make sure to do so, thank you!

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  2. poetrylifestyle · March 10, 2016

    Love this!

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